JLSC INTRA-FORUM CONTEST #4
CRITIQUES OF HAZELGLOW'S SONG
HAPPY JUST BEING HERE
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Hazelglow's comments on his entry: Phew, I made it. I set myself the goal of trying to write and record a new song by the end of the week, and get it online for IFC#4. Might sound like a silly idea but I wanted the challenge to try help break my writing drought of many months. Not sure what I've created mind you, but it's been fun and kept me busy the last three evenings. Is it pop, is it jazz? Is it sh#@? I dunno! Anyhoo, it's called "Happy Just Being Here"... |
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06-Alex Calvo |
8.25 |
You have an awesome voice! The recording quality is flawless. I love the horn section too. Very intimate! |
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92-Bobbio |
6 |
Simple jazz....bouncy but with no back beat....needs that to really make sense...lyrics nothing out of the ordinary..Maybe with drums it wouldn't feel so dull....just goes in a straight line......and for way too long...this is new...I'm sure you're still working it out.. |
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05-David Tallent |
6.9 |
Good voice, although some words got lost due to bad enumciation. Liked the song |
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03-Joe Huettner |
7.75 |
Very pure voice, I like it, it really helps to bring out the words. And I've always loved swing. I really like the chorus, it's quite catchy. I like the melody on the word "you" at the end of the choruses. And the trumpet is nice! The overlapping vocals at the end are very nice. Apart from my thoughts about the actual writing of the song: a full horn arrangement for the song would be pretty cool. |
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04-Mike Tricker |
6.75 |
avregare stuff just didnt move me. |
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91-Christina |
9 |
Nice jazzy/swingy piece, Haze. This and Irish ballads are definitely your style. You could push your voice out even more at times, it would add more character to the melody. A little boost on percussion would also help Good lounge music once you polish it up some more. Great effort. |
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95-gogofantastik |
7.5 |
i really like the progression at the bridge/chorus. well-thought out, musically. Melody seamless viz progression. you know how i hear this? sped up, played as pop-punk with overdriven guitars, drums pounding a straight rhythm (not swung), more of a classic rock 4-4 feel... (something like sloan, if you know who that is, or even sum 41 ...) - well that's how i'd cover it anyways... didn't hear much of the lyrics.. |
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07-Nancy G. Brundrett |
8.75 |
You have done it again..you have shared another one of your |
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11-Joro |
8.5 |
This is a really good song. |
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08-Don Lyman |
9 |
Nice song. Very smooth, melodic, and soothing. You have a nice voice. Could picture this in a film soundtrack behind a love scene montage -- couple walking playfully down the beach, etc. :) Horn section was a nice touch. My only criticism is that the vocals sometimes went a little flat at the ends of phrases. Otherwise, great job! |