INTRA-FORUM CONTEST #7
CRITIQUES OF KRIS S' SONG
WHAT, WHEN & WHERE
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| 01-Iggy |
Strong Points: Nicely mixed song with clear, up front vocals. The lyrics actually said something and were logical. Very good guitar playing. The title of the song was mentioned in the chorus. Needs Improvement: I didnt have the lyrics, but I only heard the actual title of the song stated once. I would not have remembered it. The chorus was only sung once. Summary: Good song with a solid message. Could improve if the title could be incorporated more into the song driving the message home to the listener. |
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| 06-Bobbio | Strong vocal....nice guitar work....vocal a little too dramatic, I think it needs to match the mood of the soft guitar...the bridge was unique...lyrically, I got the idea...and then lost it....guess I'm thinkin' that the singer should not be so concerned with what "fools" are up to... | |
| 05-Todd | Amazing voice and overall ambiance. There's a timing thing going on her though that keeps it from being at the top of my list; could be the lack of percussion, but the mandolin-esque part drags against the main guitar and vocal. That instrument DOES need to stay, I'd just do another take to solidify the track - the small things can distract the listener. Make no mistake though, this one is a winner. Wouldn't write so much about it if I wasn't so interested in its development. Bravo. | |
| 10-Kneena | A TREASURED KEEPSAKE | |
| 07-Jens | A fine musical expression with a lot of personality! At first it feels a little raw and unshaped, but it wins a lot after a few listens. An original structure with verse-verse-chorus-instrumental ending. I like it very much, but it is not a typical hit-song with a great commercial appeal. This is not a kind of music I know very well, so it is hard to say how it could be improved. Perhaps making a softer production if it can be done without removing the great soul of the song. |
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| 04-Markus | The overall mood is good and the
guitars and the mandolin (or is it a 12 atring?) and your voice sound
beautiful. But something is going wrong with the timing. When the vocals
come in, I am not able to follow the metrum anymore and I cannot count
quarter notes. Mabye inaccurcies happened during the recording session?
Or did you through some 3/4 or 5/4 bars into it? Maybe the melody line
doesn't fit into the rhyhtmic sceme. I am totally confused :-) You should check this out. The song might be beautiful! And the lyrics are beatiful, too. Mabye they need to be matched into the song's rhythm. |
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| 02-Nancy G. Firefly |
I can't get my computers to cooperate. I can not listen to your sounds.
So I will comment on your lyrics, after all I love poetry. You words
crave into my heart. I feel these words and relate. I love the message
you are conveying. Firefly |
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| 11-Dave C | Impressive guitar skills, both the playing and production but I agree with other reviewers that it feels a little 'free time' in a few sections (it might be my imagination but I think the down beat moved to the 'and of 4' suggesting a measure of 7/8 . but again, probably just my imagination). The mandolin sound (high up on the guitar neck?) is great and I really liked the lyrics. | |
| 09-Peter M | Great song. Clear meaning, evocative
and out-of-the-mainstream words "what fools they be, leaving love
behind like love comes around for free", "say goodbye to a lover
for fear of what they've yet to find". Concise and very observant.
Beautifully composed and played. Is that tremolo played on a guitar or mandolin? I don't see any problem with the timing; I hear you playing from your voice's natural cadence instead of playing to keep time. You just as easily could have used backup singers as your only accompaniment, or a trumpet, but you used the guitar because you're obviously good enough to play in that style. I don't like your voice. It's an excellent voice, I just don't like it. Hah. Thought you were gonna get off clean, didn't you? ;-) Other than that, excellent stuff. |
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| 03-Brian | The guitar intro & the chords at the begining of each verse cycle sound a bit like The Who's Behind Blue Eyes while the melody in that part sounds similar to John Denver's Christmas for Cowboys..both cool songs in my opinion. I didn't listen to the hi-fi version nor did I hear it through headphones but it sounded like a pretty good mix from what I could tell. I too found the timing a bit of an issue in places. I liked the chord choices although to me it sounded a bit repetitive. I think it has an interesting mood | |
| 91-Solpig | Kris S.??? Now I'm really scratching my head.My best songwriter-friend here in LA is your musical doppleganger(Twin).His name is Pat Millius,and you two sound so much alike,it's scary.I love his music too. I LOVE this style of passionate,non-conformism.F the people who want you to beat a hackneyed chorus.Leave that for people who are cheesy and contrived like me. every twenty songwriters you come across the Jimi,Lou,Kurt,kind of writer who doesn't have to use the formula,and my friend...You're number twenty. This is so off the beaten path that I feel awkward using a rating system on it.You get a 10+ just for being this twisted. Keep it up. piggy |
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